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Love at First Sight Blogfest! My Excerpt


Happy Valentine's Day!  And welcome to my Love at First Sight Blogfest entry!  So, I know the rules say you're supposed to put when your characters first meet, but I already posted that scene a while back.  And really, in my books there is no love at first sight--only lust at first sight--love comes much later.  :)  So I'm using a scene where my two characters realize that no matter how hard they're trying to ignore it, the attraction between them is something they are going to have to deal with.


Setup: Quinn is a school social worker assigned to help with the school's Battle of the Bands competition.  Sean is the lead guitarist of a rock band, volunteering (well sort of, but that's another story) his musical expertise to help with the kids.  Alright, here it is in it's rough draft glory...



The students gathered their thingsfilling the room with a cacophony of conversations and chairs scraping acrossthe floor.  As the kids exited, Quinnputtered around, picking up stray papers and pencils and straighteningfurniture.  She was always amazed at howquickly teenagers could turn a place upside down.  She wandered to the back of the classroom to grab an acoustic guitar one of the students had forgotten to put back in thecase.  She picked it up and threw thestrap over her arm, letting the instrument swing slightly while she headed backtoward the stage.  A loud bang erupted asshe accidentally knocked the guitar against a desk.
            “Theydon’t like it when you treat them rough,” Sean said, causing her to jump.
            Quinnwhirled around.  “What?”
            Heshut the door behind him and nodded at the guitar. 
            Shecringed.  “Sorry, yeah, I probablyshouldn’t be entrusted with the equipment. My musical skills are relegated to loading up songs on my ipod.”
            Henarrowed his eyes as if considering her, then placed the two cans of cola he'd been holding on a desk.  “Here, if you’regoing to be running a battle of bands, you need to at least know how to handle aguitar.”
            Quinn chewed her lip as Sean strode across the room, his gait smooth andconfident—all man.  Her gaze flicked tothe closed door of the room.  Crap.  Being alone with the sexy musician was not part of the plan.  He stopped in front of her andwrapped his hand around the neck of the instrument, easing it away from her.  He pointed to the stage.  “Sit.”
            Shehoisted herself onto the edge of the platform, her feet dangling. 
            “Areyou right or left handed?” he asked, twisting a few knobs on the top end of theguitar.
            “Okay,good.”  He put a foot on the edge of thestage and in one easy stride, lifted himself onto it, then stepped behind her.  Before she could look over her shoulder to seewhat he was doing, he lowered the guitar in front of her, his muscular armsframing her torso.  “Now, you want thebody of the guitar against your stomach or chest depending on what’scomfortable for you.”
            Theguitar rested on her leg, the edge of the instrument's body barely skimming her breasts, hyper aware of every sensation now that Sean’s arms were so close.  She took a steadying breath.  “What do I do with my hands?”
            Hisfingers circled her right wrist and brought her hand to the long part of the guitar.  “Keep your thumb on the back of the neck andthen curl your fingers around the front. This is your fretting hand.”
            Sheclosed her eyes, relishing the warmth of his touch on her fingers.  “And the other one?”
            Therewas a rasping sound as he apparently dug in the pocket of his jeans.  He dropped a piece of plastic in her lefthand.  “This is your picking hand, so youuse this on the strings.  Hold itbetween your thumb and forefinger.”
            Shelaughed as she positioned the little triangle. “You always carry a pick in your pocket?”
            “Always,”he said and released her hand.  “Now,you’re all ready to bust out a little Stairway to Heaven.”
            Shedragged the pick across the strings, and an awful sound escaped.  She cringed and peeked up at him.  “Oh yeah, I’m ready for the big time.”
            Hechuckled and squatted down.  “Here.” 
            Her breath caught as his thighs slid along the outside of hers and his body curled around her back.  His scent, a heady mixture of sandalwood and sunshine, cocooned her.  She gripped the guitar tighter and tried to focus on staying relaxed, on being cool--professional.  But alarm bells screamed in her head, alerting everynerve ending that there was a delicious man pressed against her.  Traitorous goosebumps marched across her skin.  Great.  Maybe she should just put up a billboard announcing how much this guy affected her.
            His breath brushed her ear. “Press your fingers down on this spot,” he said, guiding her right handon the neck.  “And then I’ll help youwith your picking hand.”
            Words stuck in her throat.  Shenodded.  
           His hand covered her left one, andhe led it down the strings, creating a perfect sounding note.  “There you go, your first chord.  You’re on your way.”
            Sheswallowed hard and wet her lips.  “Playsomething, Sean.  Let me see a professional do it.”
            Shefigured he would take the guitar from her and strap it onto himself, giving her some much needed breathing room, but hedidn’t move.  His hands replaced hers, andwith her sandwiched between his muscular chest and the instrument, he startedplaying.  His fingers moved effortlesslyalong the neck, the other hand strumming. The opening to The Eagles “Hotel California” drifted through the empty dramaroom.  She closed her eyes, absorbing thesound, his smell, and the caress of his breath on her neck.  She had to bite back a sigh when his voice, low and coarse, started singing the lyrics into her ear.  Her insides melted into fiery lava.
            Without thinking,she relaxed her spine and leaned into him, releasing a tiny gasp when...

Well, I'll stop there.  We're supposed to keep this PG people.  :)  Let me know what you think.
Have a wonderful Valentine's Day!

**Today's Theme Song**
"Hotel California" - The Eagles
(player in sidebar--go ahead, take a listen)


Reader Comments (34)

OMG, I got a chill when he started singing in her ear-that was HAWT! I want a boy to sit behind me and play the guitar over me! Whew! Fave scene of the day so far.

February 14, 2010 | Unregistered CommenterFrankie Diane Mallis


Sexy, sexy, sexy. :) What a great way to fall in love.

February 14, 2010 | Unregistered Commentersarahjayne smythe

Ooh, you know just how to draw out the long, delicious moment. Very nice indeed.

February 14, 2010 | Unregistered Commenterlaurel

Ooh, you know just how to draw out the long, delicious moment. Very nice indeed.

February 14, 2010 | Unregistered Commenterlaurel

I love that he starts playing Hotel California. Love that song. (But who wouldn't love the Eagles?)

February 14, 2010 | Unregistered CommenterStephanie McGee

I always loved a man who could play guitar. Now I think I want one of my very own.

February 14, 2010 | Unregistered CommenterPiedmont Writer

Fantastic excerpt. I want to read the rest.

February 14, 2010 | Unregistered CommenterDawnB

Steamy! It reminded me of when Carrie Bradshaw dated that jazz guy on SATC.

I didn't want it to end... and now I am a bit compelled to lean guitar, er, if I can find a teacher like that!

February 14, 2010 | Unregistered CommenterAmber Tidd Murphy

Wow, what a powerfully romantic scene! Well done! Happy V-day. :)

February 14, 2010 | Unregistered CommenterShelley Sly

Omg...don't stop it there, Roni!

February 14, 2010 | Unregistered CommenterGavin

That was hot! You used so many details to bring the reader right into the room with them. I could see him stride in, feel him behind her, smell his scent. Great!

February 14, 2010 | Unregistered CommenterTricia J. O'Brien

You TEASE!! I want more, that was fabulous!

February 14, 2010 | Unregistered CommenterJulie Dao

I can't imagine being that poor girl! I'd be hyperventalating. And I bet a student walks in?

February 14, 2010 | Unregistered CommenterElle Strauss

Very steamy - excuse me while I de-mist my glasses!

Did you get someone to "walk" you through this experience?

February 14, 2010 | Unregistered CommenterElaine 'still writing' Smith

I think I'm in love! That was so sensual.


February 14, 2010 | Unregistered CommenterDonna Hole

Frankie, I want that too (clearly, lol) and thanks!

Sarahjayne, thanks and I agree, wouldn't that be lovely?

Laurel, thanks!

Stephanie, glad you like the song choice. I was trying to go for something that was so universal, anyone would know what it sounded like. Plus, it's a great song. :)

Piedmont, lol, let me know if you find one!

Dawn, thanks and I'm guessing you will get to read the rest ;)

Amber, lol, let me know if you find that teacher.

Shelley, thanks and happy v-day back at ya!

Gavin, lol, good, glad it left you wanting more!

Tricia, thanks! Glad it drew you in. :)

Julie, thanks! and sorry, had to tease, things get a little less PG after that.

Elle, I'd hyperventilate too! And not a student, but the principal. :)

Elaine, lol, I wish someone had walked me through that experience! No, I actually researched guitar stuff online to get the right terms and such. (Plus, I'm a badass on guitar for Rock Band on my Wii so I'm like practically a pro, right?lol)

Donna, thanks! Glad you liked it. :)

February 14, 2010 | Unregistered CommenterRoni @ FictionGroupie

OMG, you're amazing.

February 14, 2010 | Unregistered CommenterOddyoddyo13

That was captivating, Roni. I was totally there in the scene. Then, you ruined my moment with the musician by stopping. Oh, well. Hurry up and get published!!!!

February 14, 2010 | Unregistered CommenterTina Lynn

That was awesome Roni!

one thing though. I play guitar, and right-handed people actually use their left hands to fret. Just thought I'd let you know.

other wise it was amazing.

February 14, 2010 | Unregistered Commenterdorkvader

Sigh. Nothin' like a good sexy music scene. Well done!

February 14, 2010 | Unregistered CommenterKaren Amanda Hooper

It is quite universal. Great song. Great choice. Great scene. The song does have a great sound. It's always a good one for a movie soundtrack. (Since we know your books will be turned into movies, it's fun to think about the soundtracks.) :D

February 14, 2010 | Unregistered CommenterStephanie McGee

Oddy, Aww, thanks! :)

Tina, Didn't mean to ruin your moment and as for publishing, I'm trying, girl, I'm trying.

Dorkvader, you are so right. Duh. I know that, that's even how I play with the make believe rock band guitar, lol. Thanks for the catch! And how awesome that you actually play real guitar. I'm jealous. :)

Karen, thanks!

Stephanie, I love thinking about soundtracks, so much fun. I've noticed more and more authors putting song lists in the back of their books. Really cool. :)

February 14, 2010 | Unregistered CommenterRoni @ FictionGroupie

Nice selection, Roni<:

And with just that one snippet you have us wanting to read what comes next as well as what came before.

I remember seeing something recently about the scene from Ghost being one of the steamiest movie scenes ever. I can definitely see that was the effect you were going after here. :)

- And yep. In my novel-things I generally have the lust or vague attraction going on when the characters first meet. True love rarily happens at first sight. That would be too easy. :]

February 14, 2010 | Unregistered CommenterCatherine Kariaxi

Amazing. Liquid hot that I just want to drink up. Just amazing.

February 14, 2010 | Unregistered CommenterWendy Sparrow

Are you sure PG was part of the rules? No fair.

Hot, hot, hot!

We both have yummy rock stars for MC's, I see :-D

February 15, 2010 | Unregistered CommenterTara

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