Authorial intrusion is where you express a personal opinion about a character, situation or scene. Or where you describe anything your characters could not be aware of. (source)
This is where the author inserts things like "Jane had no idea that one decision would change everything." OR
"Little did Jane know that as she curled up in bed the killer was watching her every move from his hiding spot in the closet."
Jane sat on the curb in the rain and closed her eyes, letting the deluge soak her clothes. Shoppers hurried by her, huddling under umbrellas and giving her strange looks.
Jane held the yoga move until her face turned red with strain. OR A pained expression crossed Jane's face.
"We need to talk about this," Jane said, crossing her arms over her chest and staring at Bill. No way was she going to let him dodge the discussion this time. She needed closure.
Bill stood and walked to the window to avoid looking at her.
Bob loved how the Vera Wang dress hugged Jane's curves.
Jane climbed over the fence to get away from the man. The young policewoman crouched behind the dumpster hoping the man wouldn't see her.
She threw her engagement ring at him and yelled. "This is so over!" They had been dating for nearly four years and had met at their jobs. He'd been the lawyer who had mentored her when she first started at Fancy Pants law firm.
"Those kids over there are the stoners," she said to the new girl. "I would steer clear of them. All that crap they're doing is going to melt their brains. Anyone who thinks spending your day smoking weed is going to get you anywhere is crazy."
She screamed when a man jumped out of her closet.
"Yes, Bob, as we discussed last month, the department is really struggling with this issue."
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